Click on the comments below to see our fabulous Holiday Snap Shot Stories. Student's work will be published as it is completed.
We are learning to write about a short space of time.
We will know we can do this when:
- we have written about no more than seven minutes of a personal experience
- included adjectives to describe feelings, tastes, smells and what we see
- described our thoughts and emotions.
It gazed at me with it's dark, evil eyes. It looked like it had crashed on Earth from Mars. I slowly put it in my mouth, wondering what it would do to me. i bit into it slowly. Then a gooey, sour, lava oozed slowly into my mouth.
ReplyDeleteIt was like there was a small, mad, acid-like volcano erupting on my poor tortured taste buds. I desperately crawled on the floor with small tears in my eyes. I was coughing. I was spluttering trying to hold myself together. But suddenly it all stopped. I got up, brushed myself off and smiled. I had engulfed the gooey sour lava out of the angry... DESTROYER!
I spinned around for just one tinsy second. Waves crashed quickly up against my feet. I was frightened and scared with fear. The water was freezing cold at a super low temperature. My hands fell straight back and hit the sharp pointy rocks. My hands and feet slipping like crazy. It felt like mad dogs trying to get off a chain backwards and forwards. The waves were banging loudly against each other so noisily like thunder. BIG, BANG, BOOM, BIG, BANG, BOOM.
ReplyDeleteI slowly stood up. Shocked, shaking and shivering. I could taste the yuck salt water. I was so, so, so wet. I fell back onto my bum to see a massive wave quickly coming straight towards me. I instantly dived out of the way. I landed on some wet rocks. I was soaking wet, freezing cold and needed a hot bath immediately.
My yummy chocolate sauce melted around my mouth. I was extremely excited with what I had made. I loved my sweet sauce I made wit my nana. I had no idea if I could make it or not. I was thinking of Master Chef when they make amazing meals on t.v. I was scared that it would be yuck after I'd spent a long time on my chocolate sauce.
ReplyDeleteThe sauce was going down my mouth with sweetness. Nana and I made a perfect dish and did everything we were supposed to do.
KATIE! Nice story/recount Joe... Good one Jake Yum YUM did you save me any
ReplyDeleteNO Katie i ate it all in the school holidays about 4 weeks ago l.o.l.
ReplyDeleteThe purple jet of light exploded from my wand tip sending the Snatcher soaring to the stars with blinding speed. I prepared for the next wave. As soon as I spotted him I shouted "Stupefy," and with stunning accuracy the spell merged with his face. Annoyingly! Every time one vanquished another took their place. Quite suddenly a sound like a machine gun ripped through the air irritating me more than the enemies. Enraged I shouted, "Confringo," directing the explosive beam towards the red specs coming from behind the rock causing the attacker to somersault away. I had prepared to cast a protective charm. It was only then I realised I had beaten the challenge!! I felt this was my greatest achievement in the game so far.
ReplyDeletehi Levi here.nice recount michael
ReplyDeleteReally good snapshot Micheal, it made me feel like I was right there.
ReplyDeleteP.s Miss Paterson will you be putting all of our stories on the blog.
Cool snapshot story Joe, 'Gum from mars' :-}
ReplyDeleteI am hoping to get everyone's snapshot posted on here as they are finished Angus :) People have worked so hard that we need to share them.
ReplyDeleteLike your story Michael - you gonna be an author?
ReplyDeleteMichael, I really liked your snapshot, it was really descriptive and i felt like i was Harry Potter. Great work!!!
ReplyDeleteGreat snapshot writing Room 5. Joe has just told me what a Destroyer is, I was very confused?! I agree with Angus, Michael,your writing did make me fell as though I was there. I loved your descriptive sentence comparing your movements to mad dogs trying to get off a chain, Katie. That's just what it can be like in the sea. Jake, the way you wrote about the chocolate sauce makes me a bit hungry for some, you do know that teacher aides like chocolate sauce too? :)
ReplyDeleteJake you should have saved some for us ==@
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